Y10 human rights essay advice

okay going viral here we go hashtag influencer on human rights and freedoms assessment want to talk a little bit about your essay in today’s recording we’re calling it a three paragraph essay I’m not including the introduction not including conclusion I’m assuming that they are going to be there so I’m going to talk about the three body paragraphs on the topics that we’ve identified some topics being genocide a human rights abuse of your choice and lastly an indigenous rights issue of your choice that one is from the booklet that you’ve got today’s is Shirley self research the Human Rights which we’ve talked about extensively in class I’m giving you some sort of stretch of examples for that but still ultimately it’s your choice now what what is that that both in paragraph has got to have a it’s got to have a thesis it’s got a hypothesis I’ve got to know where it’s going and remember the question you’re looking at is is pretty much is the United Nations and non-governmental organizations effectively helping and supporting the the process of intervening and making lives better for those people that need their lives we make better so that’s what we doing with your your introduction I want to see I kind of not now in what’s gonna follow and want to see in miniature your answer to that overarching question now in each of the body paragraphs you know firstly Rwanda we need to see as teachers we need to see that you’ve got knowledge you know what happened the key features the key points being 800,000 deaths in a hundred days being that the background to the Hutu its you rivalry be the machetes be it the power radio we need to know that you have acquired you start with knowledge so that’s the first thing we need to see we need to see analysis right we need to see why the United Nations was as good or not good or as effective or ineffective as we have explained it it was like what factors influence that the effectiveness over the waters of the UN that visual analysis in this paragraph so you are analyzing what the UN’s response was and why it was so she ultimately then you evaluating their response you’re saying how good it was based on the evidence so that’s the key thing each of your paragraphs in the second paragraph on the human right of your choice you’ve got to show me but you’ve done some research right be it kids who are working in a in a bandwidth issue factory billion Pakistani kids were stitching together footie balls and B refugees we’re trying to settle in a new country or beer women who and girls who are facing lack of educational choice of like Malala maybe some of you have used Malala anyway but again why they’re facing these choices can’t man is it and what has been the response already UN or particularly non-government organizations and you’ve seen on the screen today in class Human Rights Watch you’ve seen amnesty what is it that they do in order to make and pressurize government’s into doing stuff they publish statistics so when you evaluate in the response are more people getting executed in certainly Arabia in chop shops greater than they used to be if that’s the case how effective has the world response be more executions I would suggest means a lack of response from HG NGOs a Human Rights Watch Amnesty were a lack of effective response it might be that they come out and criticize and they say all dog do this selling Rabia as back on the rest but in terms of the actual effectiveness it can evaluate it based on the evidence lastly and we’ve given you fully intentionally some information about the stone wages how indigenous australians for many many many many years have had their wages almost like confiscated stopped and held by the state governments and not gotten back right so theft on a on a state even maybe a federal scale right that that these antigens people in a time when we hear about closing the gap learn legend all of those things those messages are different from the reality but in this you have to read the information you have to decide which of the the sources on the Stolen Generations of stone wages all around rights which of those you are going to say is a human right which has not been upheld or supported by Australian or state governments and how are you going to say that’s been the case how you gonna evidence it in your response right so there’s your three body paragraphs lastly your conclusions should should should wrap up effectively what you have been saying that ultimately the response of the United Nations has been brilliant and the response of the NGOs has been wonderful and everything in the world is happy alternatively it might be that the young responses haven’t been great but the NGOs of poor governments on notice they’ve made people very very aware of these issues and therefore countries are having to respond to those issues it might be that both the UN and the NGOs have been omission as long as you can support with well-constructed sentences paragraphs grammatically accurate with good vocabulary and good spelling this will be a breeze but you must make sure that your preparation page is being done I’m putting the guide of around a hundred words for that and any notes that you’re gonna use you take into the interview town and they’re well prepared and highlighting so you know exactly what you’re going to be writing about because it’s key that you know what you’re gonna say don’t get to the test and how in that hour and a quarter it will all just fall into place this is about preparation use this week in order to do your prep and make sure that when the exam we’re also you’re all set Gill’s good look and see you on the neck

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